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<p class=MsoPlainText><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'>First
Case Study for “No Wonder Brides Often Turn Into Frankenstein”<o:p></o:p></span></font></b></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'><o:p> </o:p></span></font></b></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'>Response
#1<o:p></o:p></span></font></b></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>SCORE: HIGH FAIL<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>Comments: Although this
essay features at least one solid example, there are simply too many sentence
level errors to warrant a passing score. This essay is highly dependent on
vague language that is not persuasive.<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'><o:p> </o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'>Response
#2</span></font></b><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'><o:p></o:p></span></font></b></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>SCORE: HIGH FAIL<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>Comment: This essay
offers a cursory response to the topic questions, and it includes a nice
example and some perceptive points against Barry’s argument. However,
there is a significant lack of development in each area of the essay, and there
are frequent major and minor grammar and sentence structure errors throughout.<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'><o:p> </o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'>Response
#3<o:p></o:p></span></font></b></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>SCORE: <st1:place w:st="on"><st1:PlaceName
w:st="on">Low</st1:PlaceName> <st1:PlaceType w:st="on">Pass</st1:PlaceType></st1:place><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>Comment: This is a
marginal passing essay. Although it follows the fiver paragraph format
(missing a conclusion), it adequately summarizes Barry’s position, offers
a clear argument against Barry, and provides sufficient examples to support
that argument.<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'><o:p> </o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'>Response
#4<o:p></o:p></span></font></b></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>SCORE: Pass<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>Comment: This is a
clearly passing response, one that manages to both fulfill the requirements of
the essay topic and provide original, fresh insight on the topic at hand. If
the essay were a bit longer, it might warrant a high pass. Many students will
be confused by the writer’s use of exaggeration and hyperbole, mimicking
Barry. This may call for another conversation about tone for an essay and how
humor and wit can aid in the engagement of reading material.<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'><o:p> </o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>Here are the scores for
the case studies in <u>Write It!</u><b><span style='font-weight:bold'><o:p></o:p></span></b></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'><o:p> </o:p></span></font></b></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>Joshua Fenton<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span style='font-size:12.0pt;
font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'><br clear=all style='page-break-before:
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<p class=MsoPlainText><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'>Second
Case Study for Margaret Lawrence’s “The Shack”<o:p></o:p></span></font></b></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'><o:p> </o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'>Response
#1<o:p></o:p></span></font></b></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>SCORE: <st1:place w:st="on"><st1:PlaceName
w:st="on">LOW</st1:PlaceName> <st1:PlaceType w:st="on">PASS</st1:PlaceType></st1:place><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>Comment: This is an incredibly
brief essay, but it does answer the topic questions and include an example.
This is a marginal passing essay as one is likely to encounter.<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'><o:p> </o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'>Response
#2<o:p></o:p></span></font></b></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>SCORE: <st1:place w:st="on"><st1:PlaceName
w:st="on">LOW</st1:PlaceName> <st1:PlaceType w:st="on">PASS</st1:PlaceType></st1:place><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>Comment: The essay
includes a clear summary of <st1:City w:st="on">Lawrence</st1:City>’s
main point, a thesis statement indicating the author’s opinion on <st1:place
w:st="on"><st1:City w:st="on">Lawrence</st1:City></st1:place>’s essay,
and solid examples to back up that opinion. The writing is not sophisticated,
but it is good enough to warrant a passing grade.<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'><o:p> </o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'>Response
#3<o:p></o:p></span></font></b></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>SCORE: PASS<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>Comment: This is a
clearly competent essay. The summary and examples are incredibly detailed.
Perhaps the only problems are its lack of paragraph development and occasional
sentence level error. Nevertheless, it is obviously a passing paper, and the
amount of detail set forward here raised the success of the essay.<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'><o:p> </o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><b><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman";font-weight:bold'>Response
#4<o:p></o:p></span></font></b></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>SCORE: (ESL) HIGH FAIL<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p class=MsoPlainText><font size=3 face="Times New Roman"><span
style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman"'>Comment: This author
clearly understands <st1:place w:st="on"><st1:City w:st="on">Lawrence</st1:City></st1:place>’s
argument, but s/he simply lacks the command of written English necessary to
pass.<o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
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font-family:Arial'><o:p> </o:p></span></font></p>
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